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CCP Abraxas
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Posted - 2009.06.16 12:09:00 -
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I thought, after the gruesome treatments you people have suffered at our hands over the last few months, that you deserved something a little more bittersweet.
I'm not used to writing stories like this, so consider this one an experiment. Note to every one of you writers out there: Try writing stuff based on protagonists, situations and experiences that couldn't possibly map directly to your own existence. People of different, age, genders and opinions. It's a revelation, I tell you.
This is a new entry in our chronicle series, published on Monday every other week.
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tikki
Malicious Intentions Cult of War
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Posted - 2009.06.16 13:11:00 -
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Talon Jasra
Gallente Salvage and Mining Consortium Alternative Realities
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Posted - 2009.06.16 13:17:00 -
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Oddly enough, if you take the 2nd link, you can get to it and it works. same URL and everything |
Per Bastet
Amarr B.O.O.M
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Posted - 2009.06.16 13:35:00 -
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This is a Very Good Story, I wish you guys would put one out every week. --
Bastet's Organization Of Mining |
Mon Fin
Gallente Carniffles Corp
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Posted - 2009.06.16 13:52:00 -
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Very nice story - very human. |
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CCP Abraxas
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Posted - 2009.06.16 14:09:00 -
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Originally by: Talon Jasra I did enjoy it. Very well written, too bad it ended on a rather sudden cliff hanger.
Except it's not really a cliff hanger; it's the twist in the story. Everything gets quietly turned around in those last two lines. |
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Miyamoto Uroki
Caldari Katsu Corporation
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Posted - 2009.06.16 14:52:00 -
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So he finally died, yes? Is that it? Seeing his already dead friends again one last time, talking to them while actually talking to himself in his vision. Nice one |
Myrhial Arkenath
Ghost Festival
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Posted - 2009.06.16 14:54:00 -
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Oh wow, I didn't see that coming till the last lines. Certainly put me on the wrong track there, trying to figure it out, thinking I had figured it out and then suddenly it becomes something different. |
General Esylium
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Posted - 2009.06.16 15:31:00 -
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Forgive my lack of understanding, english is not my original language, maybe because I am very tired.
so was he dead from the beginning or when he saw his 2nd old friend just before he met his dead wife or whatever she was?
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Deviana Sevidon
Gallente Panta-Rhei Guardian Federation
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Posted - 2009.06.16 16:12:00 -
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Edited by: Deviana Sevidon on 16/06/2009 16:12:56 From what I understand, he died in the moment he had his first vision.
What followed was a Hallucination his Implants and failing Brain-Cells caused together with his wish to meet old friends one last time.
Or if you prefer the idea, he died and came into a kind of heaven where he could join his dead friends.
Quote: Disclaimer: All mentioned above contains my opinion and is therefore an absolute truth (for me anyway, my universe, muhahaha.....ok, done
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Luxior
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Posted - 2009.06.16 16:46:00 -
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This was definitely good story, last few lines made me actually think-something I enjoyed. It's to bad the story wasn't just a few lines longer, I'm curious to know what they talked about! And please release a chronicle once a week. :) |
Mithfindel
Khanid Unionist Movement
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Posted - 2009.06.16 18:16:00 -
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Quite frankly, one of the most disturbing chronicles I've read.
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Arnulf Ogunkoya
Minmatar The Causality
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Posted - 2009.06.16 20:34:00 -
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It's this sort of writing that means I'll cheerfully be buying your EVE novel when it comes out.
Empyrean Age was a major disappointment but I'm confident that you will be better. |
Letheeth Kayl
Amarr Ammatar Free Corps Curatores Veritatis Alliance
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Posted - 2009.06.16 21:48:00 -
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Oh, Dear, that is an incredibly sad story, but so rich underneath the surface we can never crack. Just the right amount of tidbits to hint at an intense life story, but vague enough to allow our own minds to fill in the expansive open spaces. There is a question about when he dies, but that too, I hope is not explained, as it's more fun to debate, and ponder. Did he die at the very end, with his friends hallucinations of a decaying mind? Or did he die at the very start, and the rest was just his mind slowly collapsing in upon itself as his brain shut down of oxygen starvation. Beautiful, and, as you said, bittersweet. Put down the mirror and return to live With pain With sin With despair Live with penance in God's glory Lesson of Tobias and the Mirror Scriptures Verses26-29 |
Irainis
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Posted - 2009.06.16 23:02:00 -
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Inidentally, my reading of it is that he dies near the end - at the moment in the text when it says 'his heart stopped'. Before that line everyone has reacted to him but after that he can't get the attention of the waitress he was talking to ten seconds earlier.
Nice change on the usual Chronicle.
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Hannah Hoffmann
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Posted - 2009.06.17 02:01:00 -
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Very dark! I loved it U know, i want to die like that... a way that u dont know when did u die... |
Pliauga
Gallente
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Posted - 2009.06.17 09:26:00 -
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Very good chronicle, although my all-time favorites are still "A Mind of Infinite Complexity" and "And sometimes the fear" but this comes close. |
Abrazzar
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Posted - 2009.06.17 11:02:00 -
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I think this is a signature sentence: "One did not truly start dying, he felt, until one was left alone." He knew he was dying but he didn't want to face it alone. So his implant conjured up his old friends from his sub-conscious to give him company until the the end. |
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CCP Abraxas
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Posted - 2009.06.17 11:23:00 -
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I'm incredibly happy with the replies in this thread.
Originally by: Per Bastet This is a Very Good Story, I wish you guys would put one out every week.
Originally by: Luxior And please release a chronicle once a week. :)
You know, when I first started writing the chronicles - all of three years ago - I had an argument with my boss. I said that I could definitely do a chronicle per week, and he very sensibly countered that doing so, along with fulfilling all the other duties of my job, would simply kill me.
That said, I would very much like for CCP to adopt a weekly chron publication schedule; but it depends on more than merely my own ability to crank out stories. |
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Rick Roler
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Posted - 2009.06.17 11:59:00 -
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I'd say "semi-sweet" instead of bittersweet Sounds like he had a full life and deserved a smooth transition into his particular version of the afterlife. Very nicely executed Abraxas, as always! |
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Math'ra Hiede
Amarr Ordo Nigrorum Susurri
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Posted - 2009.06.17 13:41:00 -
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Nice work as always Abraxas
I am happy to say your recent works have definately been much better (not that they where by any means bad before!) Still, the polish is coming out and this stuff is starting to glow.
Looking forward to your next one, and then the new novell |
Jowen Datloran
Caldari Science and Trade Institute
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Posted - 2009.06.17 14:43:00 -
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This chronicle made me want to go home from work early. |
Sudiin S
Gallente Jovian Labs Jovian Enterprises
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Posted - 2009.06.17 16:45:00 -
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A very good read, I found it to be very touching. Man, the months, years and decades are ticking away without mercy, no stopping. _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
"Yes."
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Luxior
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Posted - 2009.06.17 20:03:00 -
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Originally by: CCP Abraxas I'm incredibly happy with the replies in this thread.
Ya know, the best thing about your stories is that they are entertaining AND they explore deeper issues in a meaningful way. If you write a book I'll definitely buy it. |
Enthes goldhart
Gallente Mindstar Technology Executive Outcomes
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Posted - 2009.06.17 23:12:00 -
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Crazy story, but crazy good makes you think. |
Krystal Vernet
Minmatar Gradient Electus Matari
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Posted - 2009.06.18 14:02:00 -
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Originally by: CCP Abraxas I'm incredibly happy with the replies in this thread.
Originally by: Per Bastet This is a Very Good Story, I wish you guys would put one out every week.
Originally by: Luxior And please release a chronicle once a week. :)
You know, when I first started writing the chronicles - all of three years ago - I had an argument with my boss. I said that I could definitely do a chronicle per week, and he very sensibly countered that doing so, along with fulfilling all the other duties of my job, would simply kill me.
That said, I would very much like for CCP to adopt a weekly chron publication schedule; but it depends on more than merely my own ability to crank out stories.
Don't you have other good writers for chronicles in CCP? Maybe rotate it out.
I love the stories I've read here, especially the ones written by you. Remembering them and the RP community here was what made me want to come back here when I got tired of WoW. I've been wanting to write like I've done before, roleplaying and poetry-wise, but I'm never quite sure where to start and, moreover, how to finish what I've started. Makes me slightly depressed at times. |
Myra Rodan
Minmatar Es and Whizz Hedonistic Imperative
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Posted - 2009.06.19 17:13:00 -
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Originally by: CCP Abraxas You know, when I first started writing the chronicles - all of three years ago - I had an argument with my boss. I said that I could definitely do a chronicle per week, and he very sensibly countered that doing so, along with fulfilling all the other duties of my job, would simply kill me.
That said, I would very much like for CCP to adopt a weekly chron publication schedule; but it depends on more than merely my own ability to crank out stories.
I know you guys at CCP teamed up with White Wolf not that long ago, and I know the White Wolf guys have some very talented writers. Surely one of them can help fill in the other every other monday so we get a story each week?
Selling and delivering boosters anywhere in Eve. |
JoeBear770
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Posted - 2009.06.19 17:41:00 -
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Excellent work! The last moment plot twist, while keeping the reader guessing was, dare I say, very like the great sci-fi author Philip ****.
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JoeBear770
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Posted - 2009.06.19 17:41:00 -
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Forgot the filter, bleh.........Philip K. D*ck.
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Lusulpher
Raddick Explorations Intrepid Crossing
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Posted - 2009.06.20 08:49:00 -
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Originally by: Letheeth Kayl Oh, Dear, that is an incredibly sad story, but so rich underneath the surface we can never crack. Just the right amount of tidbits to hint at an intense life story, but vague enough to allow our own minds to fill in the expansive open spaces. There is a question about when he dies, but that too, I hope is not explained, as it's more fun to debate, and ponder. Did he die at the very end, with his friends hallucinations of a decaying mind? Or did he die at the very start, and the rest was just his mind slowly collapsing in upon itself as his brain shut down of oxygen starvation. Beautiful, and, as you said, bittersweet.
Gotta support this wholeheartedly, well-designed open-ended scenarios are far more satisfying than definite conclusions. Something about attempting[to grasp Infinity], rather than succeeding always puts a smile on my face.(even though this was bittersweet).
*Also reminds me of everything I love about Hideaki Anno's/Gainax's disturbing animes* |
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