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Barashi Nugan
Gallente Zero Point Group
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Posted - 2009.08.13 16:18:00 -
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Not digging this story.
I much prefer more traditional story writing when it comes to ultra-short stories. When you only have 5-6 paragraphs to tell a story, I don't think the main bulk should be wrapped up in a password protected wrapper (imho).
I come to the chronicles section to hear incredible stories on the pulse of the Eve universe. This could have been anywhere. It's almost as if the word "capsuleer" was tossed in there at the end to try and stitch it to Eve.
I just can't help but wonder where the incredibly rich storytelling of the older chronicles has wandered off to.
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mattig89ch1
Caldari GoldLeaf Industries
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Posted - 2009.08.13 16:58:00 -
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Interesting, I am just glad for the description of the story on the main page. I would have never understood with w/out that.
But I do agree with some of the comments about how computers should have a new programming language in the future, but I digress. Not the best of the chronicles i've seen.
Does anyone else think that the latest chronicles are getting more and more confusing? __________________________________________________ HK-47: "Can I kill him master? I would very much like to break his neck, just a little, its been a long time fantasy of mine." |
iP0D
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Posted - 2009.08.13 18:21:00 -
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Originally by: CCP Abraxas This self-aggrandizing guy is a little messed up in the head.
Ok, so he's an average EVE player.
Originally by: CCP Abraxas In real life, he met a young single mother, got to know her, eventually started dating her. The relationship, unfortunately, started to sour. The child annoyed him, while the woman spurned his touch and eventually broke up with him. He didn't like that, so he started keeping watch on her - stalking her - and eventually broke into her apartment.
Ok, so he's doing social engineering and metagaming.
Originally by: CCP Abraxas There was never a dog.
Right, that bit was too big of a spoiler
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Sieggrunt
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Posted - 2009.08.13 20:08:00 -
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Edited by: Sieggrunt on 13/08/2009 20:08:43 May be... it's about Alts of Capsuleer Alts maked for Ambulance expansion o.O
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Abrazzar
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Posted - 2009.08.13 21:17:00 -
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At first I thought it was some holoreel producer noting down ideas for movies. I was kinda confused at the end. Then I was wondering if it had something to do with the VR part in the Vitrauze Project and speculated if those snippets were a method of the sleepers to keep their population alive in a VR environment over the centuries, maybe even digitalized completely.
With the spoiler it made sense. But I didn't look for hidden hints in the text, like the file numbers, so I can't say if it's just me or the way it's written that obscured the story. -------- Ideas for: Mining
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Bo'Tox
Amarr
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Posted - 2009.08.14 08:28:00 -
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CCP Abraxas, is your story related to the game changes?
i.e. do you "introduce" some of the 1.5 changes? Pos changes, different size rigs???
Hints?
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Katrina Bekers
Gallente Hikage Corporation
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Posted - 2009.08.14 09:16:00 -
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Originally by: CCP Abraxas The plot is actually pretty straightforward; it's just all in flashback. The guy did some bad things, and he's reimagining them...
Yes, in the light of this comment and your spoiler later, it makes oh-so-much more sense now. And it turned from a "oh, meh" story, to a definitely intriguing one.
Paired with the bits we learned from the Egonics chronicle back in the days, it can give a glimpse of how screwed up normal people's minds (and perception!) are, when capsuleers zip around the galaxy...
Quote: ... and yes, CLIs FTW
Actually, that's more like an object oriented programming language, with objects, methods and even statement terminators (";").
Still, brilliant! --- Kat :: Recruitment :: Hikage Corporation |
TraininVain
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Posted - 2009.08.14 11:21:00 -
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Edited by: TraininVain on 14/08/2009 11:25:29 Wow. That was really good.
I liked all of it. The premise, the flashback style etc. etc.
I especially liked figuring out the reality from the fantasy.
Definitely one of the most interesting for a while.
This bit was the giveaway I guess :
Quote: The dog is very clever and even has his own room. The dog obeys when he's told, and when the man and woman are together, the dog doesn't bark or demand attention.
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Griffolion
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Posted - 2009.08.14 12:34:00 -
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Looked through it twice now, the dog is obviously the child. He probably didnt like the child always coming first in his partners life. I dont think he did anything awful, just stalked her when the relationship ended. Maybe the authorities got involved, thats what the court room scene was about. Now he lives alone and is using the holo machine to live out his dreams. I feel kinda sorry for him, i guess he only wants to be loved by the woman.
Cant wait for your book Abraxas, have it on pre-order.
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Poreuomai
Minmatar Mirkur Draug'Tyr Ushra'Khan
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Posted - 2009.08.14 13:23:00 -
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/me reads chronical. /me is very confused. /me decides to read chronical intro for a change. /me is happy.
Let My People Go |
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Poreuomai
Minmatar Mirkur Draug'Tyr Ushra'Khan
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Posted - 2009.08.14 13:39:00 -
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Edited by: Poreuomai on 14/08/2009 13:40:45
Originally by: Griffolion He probably didnt like the child always coming first in his partners life. I dont think he did anything awful, just stalked her when the relationship ended.
Erm ...
Originally by: CCP Abraxas Where he accidentally woke up the kid. And panicked. So he did something he can never undo.
Sounds to me like he killed the kid.
Let My People Go |
Vaden Khale
Amarr Neo Spartans Laconian Syndicate
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Posted - 2009.08.14 14:03:00 -
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Ugh...
While interesting(ish), I almost think that Abraxas has gotten a bit too, artistic, as it were. I mean, don't get me wrong, I love the stories you write (when they're somewhat easier to read and understand), but maybe you should leave the deeper story telling for a novel and get the chronicles back to historical or relevant information. History on Konrakas? Good stuff. Insight into the character of factional leaders? Good stuff. But the last few chronicles for the most part haven't even really been eve specific. As previously stated, this current story could have been set anywhere until the last sentence. Why not get some background info on pirate leaders, little short stories about them? Give us some canon on NPC officers. Just more...Eve related. Signature Locked. Please refrain from amending a moderated warning. Zymurgist |
Narciass
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Posted - 2009.08.14 16:10:00 -
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Thanks Abraxas for your post explaining the story, I couldnt figure it out , but now I am certain that your story telling scope can draw outside the lines of simple space stories , I always enjoy all of them, and I dissagree with anyone that says all of these stories have to be about pod piloting or space stations becuase its simply not true. Stories are an outlet that allow ones creativity to run free , not tied my the binds of the "real world". No matter how dark his stories are, I always enjoy Abraxas's black heart I just with there were more stories to read every week.
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Narciass
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Posted - 2009.08.14 16:11:00 -
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and yse i Just learned spelling :P
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Cerebella
Gallente The Restless Masquerade
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Posted - 2009.08.15 23:23:00 -
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There was never a dog.
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Esiel
Caldari
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Posted - 2009.08.16 04:57:00 -
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The story could be good, but it has one major ginormous flaw. You have to explain your story for anyone to get it otherwise it makes no sense.
A story can be beautifully written with amazing metaphors but if you have to explain it then you as a writer didn't do your job right. There is a lot you could have done to make your story work so that we as readers could understand just from the story what is going on.
A good idea is to have someone that has nothing to do with eve or your story read it. They may not understand everything but if they understand the story then you have succeeded. I would highly recommend people do this or something like it before putting it out.
PS CCP writers stop trying to write gimiky stories, it doesn't have to be backwards, writen like you were programing or whatever gimic you are trying, just make a good standard story and people will like it.
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Wulf Tarkin
Gallente Sons of Apathy
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Posted - 2009.08.16 13:21:00 -
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+++Out Of Cheese Error+++ +++Redo From Start+++
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Trebeck Connery
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Posted - 2009.08.16 16:42:00 -
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Originally by: Gnulpie Err ...
And what has that to do with Eve? It could be set into any other environment.
Also that style of storytelling isn't of my liking. I prefer the old-fashioned stories where some actual plot is told in more or less easy enough words and figures. But everyone to their own.
I'm going to second this one. What happened to the EVE chronicles that actually told us interesting things about EVE? Or introduced us to interesting and memorable characters in the EVE universe? Need more chronicles like Black Mountain and World on Fire
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Lusulpher
Blackwater Syndicate Raining Doom
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Posted - 2009.08.17 06:56:00 -
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Edited by: Lusulpher on 17/08/2009 06:59:18 Honestly I was confused...but I was smiling. That spoiler makes it more funny.
There was no dog and the kid is "happy and alive". Brilliantly dark.
I'm a cat person/sociopath myself, so bravo.
This one is really hard to decipher though, multiple readings or an epilogue that really points out HE IS NOW IN SPACE AND DOES NOT HAVE TO DEAL WITH THAT DRAMA, would help...just saying.
Accentuate the 'disconnect' from the simulation more. That ending can be ignored too easily.
And too much coding lines, even for effect, bad.
He visits her and helps her look for the dog, who's gone missing. It doesn't turn up, and in the end she admits that she never wanted a dog; she only wanted him. !! Freakin' twisted. 7 |
hired goon
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Posted - 2009.08.18 11:26:00 -
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Originally by: Esiel The story could be good, but it has one major ginormous flaw. You have to explain your story for anyone to get it otherwise it makes no sense.
A story can be beautifully written with amazing metaphors but if you have to explain it then you as a writer didn't do your job right. There is a lot you could have done to make your story work so that we as readers could understand just from the story what is going on.
A good idea is to have someone that has nothing to do with eve or your story read it. They may not understand everything but if they understand the story then you have succeeded. I would highly recommend people do this or something like it before putting it out.
PS CCP writers stop trying to write gimiky stories, it doesn't have to be backwards, writen like you were programing or whatever gimic you are trying, just make a good standard story and people will like it.
This. I just thought "yay let's play eve oh no it's downtime I know I'll read a chronicle!". I want a story not some brain-mincing confusion that requires me to click the 'discuss story here' link just to see what people say happened.
Oh well. There's always the Methods of Torture series -omg-
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Bartholomeus Crane
Gallente The Crane Family
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Posted - 2009.08.18 17:56:00 -
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Well, it was an interesting blog, but to be honest, without the 'explanation' in this thread, I wouldn't have made it out. Maybe I'm not too fond of the 'cryptic' chronicles, even though I think the chronicles should try to cater to all readers.
On the other hand, and more positive, I pleased to see that the Gallente IP has improved a lot along the lines as I hoped it would. Foiritan resigning, all the politics involved, and the chronicles about the Gallente background are really good. Much more along the lines as I described in this thread. I'm sure the change of direction wasn't on my account at all. I'm sure it was all planned way in advance and all that. But I want to show appreciation none-the-less ...
Keep up the good work! -- Quis custodiet ipsos custodes? |
Yon Krum
The Knights Templar R.A.G.E
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Posted - 2009.08.21 03:55:00 -
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Originally by: CCP Abraxas
And now he's hidden himself away in a pod, endlessly reliving his own version of the story, recasting those events into fictional situations where he's in the right or where they turn out a little different.
Fix that for ya, Abraxas.
What do you think our characters do when we are "logged off"?
It's when the interfaces are offline--the ship silent and asleep, that the ghost signals creep across nano-neural links and even the most-hardened capsular death-god sees the faces of his past glaring at him from the heart of stars.
--Krum
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Natalie Mia
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Posted - 2009.08.21 16:49:00 -
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OK this really brings home some memories that were not too good. My X would retell events that happen in her life that were not in her favor and change details to make it so she was not in a bad position or the events were some one else's fault. She would do this when she didn't think any one could hear her. Many people did.
I found the story interesting, kinda like he was editing his memories or what he wanted for memories through his ship's computer. I could see that ability making people crazy.
To the author... your real name is not Terri is it?
Nat
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Challenger70
Caldari Orphaned Renegades
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Posted - 2009.08.21 22:32:00 -
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This is probably the EVE chronicle that I most dislike. I too was under the impression that it was like, a director or writer of a holoreel or something similar. Or perhaps something like the holodecks of Star Trek. And yes, when you understand what is actually going on, it makes sense. But I just really don't like it that much at all :P That said, at least Chronicles are coming out regularly :) ----------------------------------------------- LAterZzZ |
Taxtro Grave
Ever Flow Atlas Alliance
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Posted - 2009.08.22 01:39:00 -
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I wish you told us the spoiler first. The story makes complete sence now. :)
Must say it wasn't the best chronicle I have read, but it still was good. :)
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Uronksur Suth
Sankkasen Mining Conglomerate
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Posted - 2009.08.24 20:13:00 -
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interesting....
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BRUCELLA 2
Gallente Horizon Fontaine Blanche House of Mercury
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Posted - 2009.08.25 10:30:00 -
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Nice story
For french readers, this is a translation of this Chronicle : here -------------------------------------------
Vous cherchez une traduction frantaise des Chroniques de EVE ? C'est ici : EVE News Center
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Tranic Gresto
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Posted - 2009.09.10 16:49:00 -
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I liked it after a while, it made me think of a malfunctioning memory implant.
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Zargyl
Black Thorne Corporation Black Thorne Alliance
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Posted - 2009.09.16 06:46:00 -
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Originally by: Barashi Nugan Not digging this story.
I much prefer more traditional story writing when it comes to ultra-short stories. When you only have 5-6 paragraphs to tell a story, I don't think the main bulk should be wrapped up in a password protected wrapper (imho).
I come to the chronicles section to hear incredible stories on the pulse of the Eve universe. This could have been anywhere. It's almost as if the word "capsuleer" was tossed in there at the end to try and stitch it to Eve.
I just can't help but wonder where the incredibly rich storytelling of the older chronicles has wandered off to.
/me signs this. Same here actually. This doesn't look too good for the coming book I have to say. I was quite looking forward to it (as I did like Gollancz's novel very much). Sorry Abraxas your stories lately are just sounding strange to me. I guess its nice to try something creative sometime, but please not all the time.
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