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Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
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Posted - 2012.04.09 19:50:00 -
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Dear All
I would like to proudly present my first eve comic book :) SYNDAX Chronicles
It's based on real game corp / alliance / players. Featuring: SYNDAX corp & members, Yulai Federation Alliance & members and of course some traitors, spies (got to bring the evil in)
Let me know what you think and if you are interested to see more episodes.
Well if you like my comic book, feel free to express it, join SYNDAX channel in game, press like here or even convo/mail me at any time :)
Episode 1: The Awakening
Episode 2: Lonely Valentine
SYNDAX Comic Book Home Page
For more info about our corp please click here
For more info about our alliance please click here |
Jowen Datloran
Science and Trade Institute
Caldari State
376
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Posted - 2012.04.09 19:56:00 -
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A good start. Please keep it up.
Mr. Science & Trade Institute, EVE Online Lorebook-a |
Codo Yagari
Yulai Guard 1st Fleet
Yulai Federation
29
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Posted - 2012.04.09 20:19:00 -
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Very nice, please keep it going! : )
http://yulaifederation.net
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Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
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Posted - 2012.04.09 20:26:00 -
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Thanks Guys for your support and encouragement |
Che Biko
Humanitarian Communists
70
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Posted - 2012.04.09 20:41:00 -
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The episodes are too short IMO. Also, episode 2, and the 2 episodes combined, feel a bit chaotic to me, and the shortness doesn't help there either. I think it would be better if you published longer episodes, now they are more like scene length.
Therefor the danger in episode 2 does not really make me worry about Mooni and the other guy, as I have not build up enough sympathy for them.
Work more on letting the reader know who the characters are. Give them, you know, character, before subjecting them to things like danger. They are kinda cardboard right now (if you did not know them before).
And if the bar is not a 21th century one, then I don't like how it looks, it seems way out of place for EVE and it is something that I think could be easily avoided, but I do not know how you produce the comics, so I can't give detailed advice on that.
Other than that, if things improve, I might become a fan. |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
1
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Posted - 2012.04.10 04:06:00 -
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Thanks for you valuable feedback
I would say its short for time constrains I release a new one once every week
As for developing character I agree and I am developing it for vit and Silandras
Going back to the bar and eve this is a storyline progression that will be uncovered on the next episode and you will be able to know the reason why these 2 stories are mixed and how they are related
Hope the story improves and you become a fan soon |
Lynne Rankin
Ubuntu Inc.
15
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Posted - 2012.04.10 08:37:00 -
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Been down to Providence, so I have an idea of the area you're basing this out of. NRDS is nice for neuts.
As per your story, I find it very interesting and I bookmarked it to view each week. I agree with Che Biko on all points, but when it comes to length I do agree that it's too short, but I'm hopeful that as you get used to the process of making this comic you'll get faster at it and make each episode a little longer.
As it stands right now, I think it's too short but it's not a killer for me or manditory to have a book each episode. I mean look at Darths & Droids web comic >_> they only release 3 strips each week. You just post all 3 on the same day. I think you're fine as it stands at this time, but you may want to add just a couple more strips later on if you're able. |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
1
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Posted - 2012.04.10 09:49:00 -
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Thanks a lot for your positive feedback
I have received many comments In this regard to
I will surely get faster with time but as it stands now not all elements are setup and 3D modeling takes time
But yeh once all modules are ready it will be just plug and play
So I accept your comments and will work on them for sure |
RC Mine
RC Industries
Yulai Federation
0
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Posted - 2012.04.10 13:05:00 -
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Love your stories Mooni ;) Can't wait for the next to come.
As you make and publish more of them the storyline will be easier to follow also.
Keep up the good work and we talk ingame later  |
Silentleaf
Obsidian Mining Syndicate
Yulai Federation
0
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Posted - 2012.04.10 13:16:00 -
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Keep up the good work  |
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Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
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Posted - 2012.04.10 13:44:00 -
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Thanks guys for your kind words |
Handax
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
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Posted - 2012.04.10 16:10:00 -
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Hello Mooni!
First of all Congratulations for taking such an efford to create that comic book. I wish you all the best on that, as i know that you have put much efford on it. I have to agree with many that the episodes are kinda short and the characters have to been build up before they can win the sympathy of the reader. Some minor mistakes on the design part (as the bar someone mentioned which doesn't fit with the EVE environment) can be corrected as the comic progresses. In general i think you are on the right track though. Maybe as someone mentionend you could release less often but more content^^. I'm curious to see how the story continues so keep it coming :)
PS: I'm honored to be part of that comic book.
o7 |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
3
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Posted - 2012.04.10 16:24:00 -
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Hi Handax
Thank you for your kind words. I am very much inspired by your leadership, It is the kindness in your heart that lead me to imagine you as a hero, putting others in front of your self. This is what I think you are and this is how you will be in my story :)
Hmm as for the old bar decoration, there is a reason behind it, as the story progresses, it will make sense :) |
Bluddwolf
Heimatar Military Industries
14
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Posted - 2012.04.12 04:33:00 -
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Artisically, I like your work. The story telling is a tad basic, but I appreciate you are just starting out and you will improve in time.
If I may suggest a book, I've found very inspiring: The Guide to Writing Fantasy and Science Fiction by Philip Athans
You might also want to go to www.fanfiction.net This is a cool website and you will find dozens of short stories and novels written, based on EVE.
/liked
To join Heimatar Military Industries-a visit website or conatct Bluddwolf in-gamewww.hmi.guildlaunch.com |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
7
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Posted - 2012.04.12 09:02:00 -
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Thanks a lot for this will look into it for surE
Your help is much appreciated |
chris Zamayid
DECIMA LEGIO
Yulai Federation
0
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Posted - 2012.04.12 18:57:00 -
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Great start Guys Keep it up and looking forward to episode 3 |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
8
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Posted - 2012.04.12 19:49:00 -
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Thanks Alot :) will be out this weekend
a*zG#+G%Ga&& NRDS a&fG%oG%|Gd
-a-a-a-aColor Your LIfe
-a-a-a www.syndax.info
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Zergmond
Accord Services
Yulai Federation
0
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Posted - 2012.04.12 23:41:00 -
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Excellent beginning.
This is an example of how a "toon" becomes a personality.
If an alliance or corporation can provide an appeal that goes beyond raw power and wealth, then it provides an opportunity to its members to experience something greater.
You have taken a step toward something greater.
Zerg |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
9
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Posted - 2012.04.13 03:27:00 -
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Thanks Zerg
Your kind words are flattering.
a*zG#+G%Ga&& NRDS a&fG%oG%|Gd
-a-a-a-aColor Your LIfe
-a-a-a www.syndax.info
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Syna Anima
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
0
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Posted - 2012.04.13 13:59:00 -
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Best ever! :D
Love it Mooni! Always a pleasure to read your comics!
BTW to those unaware, all characters in the comic book are real. :)
Join syndax channel in game to talk to us in person! :D
G` Join us today! G` |
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Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
10
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Posted - 2012.04.13 15:54:00 -
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lol i loved your comment Syna :)
WE ARE REAL :D join us the fun and become epic!
Write your name in the history of eve.....
Become something different.....
Syndax where your story begins....
;)
a*zG#+G%Ga&& NRDS a&fG%oG%|Gd
-a-a-a-aColor Your LIfe
-a-a-a www.syndax.info
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Bantara
Corp 54
Curatores Veritatis Alliance
5
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Posted - 2012.04.13 22:42:00 -
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You must hull-tank, Mooni, cause you got cahones. ;)
Kudos on starting such a creative, potentially-fulfilling, and person project, and doing so in the eyes of an all-too-often brutal internet!! |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
11
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Posted - 2012.04.14 03:03:00 -
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Hah
Yes I need to be more creative and hull tank or maybe get a carrier that.can swoop my ship into its bay
Thanks allot for your nice comments and please say howdy to Wild :)
a*zG#+G%Ga&& NRDS a&fG%oG%|Gd
-a-a-a-aColor Your LIfe
-a-a-a www.syndax.info
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Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
11
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Posted - 2012.04.14 21:47:00 -
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Hi
Episode 3 is out sorry its short, like I said I will try to make it longer as I complete all the modules needed with time
Episode 3: That's Amore
This episode is dedicated to Paparazzo from BOONDOCKS as a token of appreciation for all the fun he brings when he is around :) Really miss him :)
Here is why:
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:09:16 ] Don Sidious > o/
[ 2011.12.05 15:09:37 ] Paparazzo > o/
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:10:25 ] Mooni Amore > o/
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:11:03 ] Paparazzo > When the moon hits your eye Like a big-a pizza pie That's amore When the world seems to shine Like you've had too much wine That's amore
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:11:20 ] Don Sidious > lul wut?
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:11:35 ] Paparazzo > muhaha
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:12:54 ] Paparazzo > you dont know dean martin?
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:13:14 ] Don Sidious > no
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:13:23 ] Paparazzo > ah..its a song
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:14:07 ] Don Sidious > Ok
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:17:46 ] Mooni Amore > lol
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:17:50 ] Mooni Amore > so my name is a song?
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:17:59 ] Mooni Amore > yeh
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:02 ] Mooni Amore > i heard that song
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:04 ] Mooni Amore > its italian?
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:17 ] Paparazzo > yes
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:20 ] Mooni Amore > yeh yes
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:22 ] Mooni Amore > i heard it :)
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:25 ] Paparazzo > its a love song at that
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:27 ] Mooni Amore > i remember now lol
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:31 ] Mooni Amore > true
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:18:46 ] Paparazzo > hehe
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:19:59 ] Mooni Amore > ty for that
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:20:04 ] Mooni Amore > well spotted :P
n++[ 2011.12.05 15:20:30 ] Paparazzo > pleasure
Comments always appreciated of course.
a*zG#+G%Ga&& NRDS a&fG%oG%|Gd
-a-a-a-aColor Your LIfe
-a-a-a www.syndax.info
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Kadmo
Yulai Guard 1st Fleet
Yulai Federation
0
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Posted - 2012.04.15 14:28:00 -
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Awsome job Moonie! Waiting for new episodes :) |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
11
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Posted - 2012.04.15 20:35:00 -
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Thanks Kadmo
Miss fleeting with you :)
a*zG#+G%Ga&& NRDS a&fG%oG%|Gd
-a-a-a-aColor Your LIfe
-a-a-a www.syndax.info
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Telegram Sam
The Drones Club
254
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Posted - 2012.04.16 20:35:00 -
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Good stuff, keep it up! I like the way it's based on real player characters and a real corp. |
Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
11
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Posted - 2012.04.17 00:21:00 -
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Thanks a lot
Those players are really special that's why I wanted to keep capture their memory in a book
a*zG#+G%Ga&& NRDS a&fG%oG%|Gd
-a-a-a-aColor Your LIfe
-a-a-a www.syndax.info
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Mooni Amore
SYNDAX CORPORATION
Yulai Federation
12
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Posted - 2012.04.28 18:50:00 -
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Hey All
Sorry for not releasing episode 4 last week, I got busy with my brother's reception party :)
The episode is out now, enjoy reading
Episode 4: They Key
Special thanks to who ever posted the lovely pictures I took from this website, its awesome and saved me a lot of time if I am take them my self :)
a*zG#+G%Ga&& NRDS a&fG%oG%|Gd
-a-a-a-aColor Your LIfe
-a-a-a www.syndax.info
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