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Dangirdas Bachir
Federal Navy Academy Gallente Federation
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Posted - 2013.11.17 01:44:00 -
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"Descendant of Minmatar. Dangirdas was found on a deflect and abandoned Minmatar cargo ship. Some freelancing scavengers found the ship and entered it for hopes of some good loot, but the only thing they found was a teenage boy in a cryobed. Awoken, Dangirdas didn't remember anything, who he was, where he came from, nor the reason he was on the ship. The only thing he remembered was his first name and some foggy memories of the Minmatar capital. He took the cargo ships code name "Bachir" and used it as his last name. The scavengers took him up and raised him. They became his new family.
While scavenging one day they were ambushed by some greedy Amarr scum, everyone died, but Dangirdas managed to get away to an escaped pod in time before the scavengers ship exploded. The escape pod went straight to the Gallente capital. He shortly after joined the Gallente Federation in hopes of vengeance against the Amarr for what they did to the Minmatar people and his scavengers family." |
Jim Roebuck
StarFleet Enterprises Fatal Ascension
134
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Posted - 2013.11.17 01:47:00 -
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Needs more stuff about ISK doubling, the New Order and general bitching about Goons. "Black shadows hanging over his shoulders Black mark up against your name Your green eyes couldn't get any colder There's red poison flowing through your veins..." AC/DC, Evil Walks |
Dangirdas Bachir
Federal Navy Academy Gallente Federation
3
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Posted - 2013.11.17 01:50:00 -
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Jim Roebuck wrote:Needs more stuff about ISK doubling, the New Order and general bitching about Goons. I'm really new to the game so i can't get these inside jokes, might you enlighten me? |
Thomas Builder
Center for Advanced Studies Gallente Federation
139
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Posted - 2013.11.17 02:12:00 -
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These are things you commonly find in people's bios.
"ISK doubling" is a common scam where people ask you to give them ISK, while promising to pay you back twice as much. Those who do these scams usually have elaborated "rules" about what amounts you can send in their bio.
The New Order is an extortion scheme, which, on top of paying them ISK, also requires you to praise them in your bio.
Finally, Goons are the most hated (and most powerful) alliance in the game. (But I haven't seen many people complain about them in their bio...)
As for your original question: I don't roleplay, so I'll refrain from commenting. There is a roleplaying forum ( https://forums.eveonline.com/default.aspx?g=topics&f=260 ), but I don't know whether they allow request for comments in there |
Dangirdas Bachir
Federal Navy Academy Gallente Federation
3
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Posted - 2013.11.17 02:32:00 -
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Thomas Builder wrote:These are things you commonly find in people's bios. "ISK doubling" is a common scam where people ask you to give them ISK, while promising to pay you back twice as much. Those who do these scams usually have elaborated "rules" about what amounts you can send in their bio. The New Order is an extortion scheme, which, on top of paying them ISK, also requires you to praise them in your bio. Finally, Goons are the most hated (and most powerful) alliance in the game. (But I haven't seen many people complain about them in their bio...) As for your original question: I don't roleplay, so I'll refrain from commenting. There is a roleplaying forum ( https://forums.eveonline.com/default.aspx?g=topics&f=260 ), but I don't know whether they allow request for comments in there Ah i have already seen this ISK doubling and New Order scamming quite a lot then already, i can't understand how people can fall for these types of scams. Do people even realize that they are playing one of the biggest scamming games ever. Feel kinda sad that they use their bios for something else then some proper biography of their character. Anyway thanks for enlightening me! :) |
Jim Roebuck
StarFleet Enterprises Fatal Ascension
134
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Posted - 2013.11.17 03:15:00 -
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I concur, actually. The New Order is not a scam. Just check this out. If you're not a miner, don't worry about having to pay 10mil ISK for a permit, but if you are, trust me, you'll want to have one in the long run. "Black shadows hanging over his shoulders Black mark up against your name Your green eyes couldn't get any colder There's red poison flowing through your veins..." AC/DC, Evil Walks |
NightCrawler 85
Phoibe Enterprises
1083
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Posted - 2013.11.17 07:07:00 -
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To the OP, its a nice bio but keep in mind that like so many things its a love/hate/dont care thing. The bio should say something about what you find interesting/enjoy/want to share/whatever so if you like the bio keep it despite what other may or may not think about it
For The New Order and permit discussion. May or may not be a scam, but when you ask around you will find that very few people actually seem to encounter them when they are outside of their regular operating areas.
So, if you often see them spamming local and you see people get blown up by them on a regular basis were you operate you can try to buy a permit and see if its a scam (in the long run the ISK is basically nothing in the long run), but otherwise.... just keep an eye on local and remember there are other people then The New Order that ganks miners Phoibe Enterprises official recruitment thread The Eve Reader - -áAudio Recordings of Eve Chronicles
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BobFenner
Black Hole Runners Brainfarts
87
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Posted - 2013.11.17 10:09:00 -
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Dangirdas Bachir wrote:"Descendant of Minmatar. Dangirdas was found on a derelict and abandoned Minmatar cargo ship. Some freelancing scavengers found the ship and entered it for hopes of some good loot, but the only thing they found was a teenage boy in a cryobed. Awoken, Dangirdas didn't remember anything, who he was, where he came from, nor the reason he was on the ship. The only thing he remembered was his first name and some foggy memories of the Minmatar capital. He took the cargo ships code name "Bachir" and used it as his last name. The scavengers took him up and raised him. They became his new family.
While scavenging one day they were ambushed by some greedy Amarr scum, everyone died, but Dangirdas managed to get away to an escape pod in time before the scavengers ship exploded. The escape pod went straight to the Gallente capital. He shortly after joined the Gallente Federation in hopes of vengeance against the Amarr for what they did to the Minmatar people and his scavengers family."
Not bad,
As a spelling **** I have corrected the two small spelling mistakes for you. :) My missus thinks of EvE as 'the other woman'. :) |
Inxentas Ultramar
Ultramar Independent Contracting Home Front Coalition
754
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Posted - 2013.11.17 11:11:00 -
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It's RP and it doesn't contain a metric ton of tough language, I like it. I also like ones with jokes or funny / relevant killmails. |
Dangirdas Bachir
Federal Navy Academy Gallente Federation
4
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Posted - 2013.11.17 12:21:00 -
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BobFenner wrote:Dangirdas Bachir wrote:"Descendant of Minmatar. Dangirdas was found on a derelict and abandoned Minmatar cargo ship. Some freelancing scavengers found the ship and entered it for hopes of some good loot, but the only thing they found was a teenage boy in a cryobed. Awoken, Dangirdas didn't remember anything, who he was, where he came from, nor the reason he was on the ship. The only thing he remembered was his first name and some foggy memories of the Minmatar capital. He took the cargo ships code name "Bachir" and used it as his last name. The scavengers took him up and raised him. They became his new family.
While scavenging one day they were ambushed by some greedy Amarr scum, everyone died, but Dangirdas managed to get away to an escape pod in time before the scavengers ship exploded. The escape pod went straight to the Gallente capital. He shortly after joined the Gallente Federation in hopes of vengeance against the Amarr for what they did to the Minmatar people and his scavengers family." Not bad, As a spelling **** I have corrected the two small spelling mistakes for you. :) YES, finally, derelict, was the word i was looking for, but the only thing that came into my mind was deflect. Thanks! |
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Maethilar
Republic Military School Minmatar Republic
11
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Posted - 2013.11.17 13:39:00 -
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I think those poor scavengers were in a bad luck tide...
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Dangirdas Bachir
Federal Navy Academy Gallente Federation
4
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Posted - 2013.11.17 13:42:00 -
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Maethilar wrote:I think those poor scavengers were in a bad luck tide...
wow don't have to be so harsh |
Keno Skir
Vectis Covert Solutions
445
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Posted - 2013.11.17 15:51:00 -
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Nice :)
I like back stories in peoples bio. Write me one that goes with the face. I'll give u isk or a special gift if i laugh out loud.
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Maethilar
Republic Military School Minmatar Republic
11
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Posted - 2013.11.17 16:00:00 -
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Dangirdas Bachir wrote:Maethilar wrote:I think those poor scavengers were in a bad luck tide...
wow don't have to be so harsh
Relax it's not personal... |
Dangirdas Bachir
Federal Navy Academy Gallente Federation
6
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Posted - 2013.11.17 16:43:00 -
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Maethilar wrote:Dangirdas Bachir wrote:Maethilar wrote:I think those poor scavengers were in a bad luck tide...
wow don't have to be so harsh Relax it's not personal... Hueheu i was being sarcastic
Keno Skir wrote:Nice :)
I like back stories in peoples bio. Write me one that goes with the face. I'll give u isk or a special gift if i laugh out loud.
Your avatar looks a bit like a super gay best friend.. Keno Skir, born in the tribal outskirts of the Minmatar capital in a low cast family. Being relatively poor he spent a good portion of his childhood stealing and doing low profile heists with his friends. Eventually he got caught in his teenage years trying to do a bigger heist than usually. Robbing a bank in the area where he lived would serve him a couple of years in jail, and that's exactly what he got. While in jail he learned to gamble, he was a natural talent, he manged to outgamble old jail members and win a lot of money while being inside. On his release he was a remarkably wealthy man compared to what he was when he did his "low" profile heists. He decided to star gambling outside jail as well, like before he was unmatched, he was eventually banned from all gamling areas and casinos. The owners marked him as a "cheater" due to the impenetrable winning spree each time he played. pls rate |
Cara Forelli
Darkstorm Corporation
55
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Posted - 2013.11.17 17:24:00 -
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Dangirdas Bachir wrote: Keno Skir, born in the tribal outskirts of the Minmatar capital to a low caste family. Being relatively poor he spent a good portion of his childhood stealing and doing low profile heists with his friends. Eventually he got caught in his teenage years trying to do a bigger heist than usual. Robbing a bank in the area where he lived would land him a couple of years in jail, and that's exactly what he got. While in jail he learned to gamble. He was a natural talent and manged to out-gamble old jail members and win a lot of money while being inside. On his release he was a remarkably wealthy man compared to what he was before his stint. He decided to start gambling outside jail as well. Like before, he was unmatched and eventually banned from all gambling areas and casinos. The owners labeled him a "cheater" due to his impossible win record. pls rate
Grammar www.ensignyooch.wordpress.com |
Oraac Ensor
School of Applied Knowledge Caldari State
299
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Posted - 2013.11.17 19:09:00 -
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Cara Forelli wrote:Dangirdas Bachir wrote: Keno Skir, born in the tribal outskirts of the Minmatar capital to a low caste family. Being relatively poor he spent a good portion of his childhood stealing and doing low profile heists with his friends. Eventually he got caught in his teenage years trying to do a bigger heist than usual. Robbing a bank in the area where he lived would land serve him a couple of years in jail, and that's exactly what he got. While in jail he learned to gamble; he was a natural talent and managed to out-gamble old jail members and win a lot of money while being inside. On his release he was a remarkably wealthy man compared to with what he was before his stint crimes. He decided to start gambling outside jail as well. Like before, he was unmatched and eventually banned from all gambling areas and casinos. The owners labeled him a "cheater" due owing to his impossible improbable win record. pls rate
Grammar Better grammar, punctuation, spelling etc. |
Cara Forelli
Darkstorm Corporation
56
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Posted - 2013.11.17 20:25:00 -
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Oraac Ensor wrote:Better grammar, punctuation, spelling etc.
I considered going further, but I still wanted it to feel like "his" www.ensignyooch.wordpress.com |
Dangirdas Bachir
Federal Navy Academy Gallente Federation
7
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Posted - 2013.11.17 20:49:00 -
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Cara Forelli wrote:Oraac Ensor wrote:Better grammar, punctuation, spelling etc. I considered going further, but I still wanted it to feel like "his" Let me see what you got bb |
Iria Ahrens
Ministry of War Amarr Empire
93
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Posted - 2013.11.18 01:44:00 -
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Too ...many...words...:P
Seriously, a lot of people will ignore any RP Bios so you want at least the first paragraph short and sweet, with a longer follow-up. That way you might get the non-rp crowd to at least read the first sentence or two.
Ditch the quotes. This is your bio, not someone else's. So the open and end quotes make it look like your bio is a copypasta. Because you disdained all my counsel, and my reproof you ignoredGÇö I, in my turn, will laugh at your doom; will mock when terror overtakes you; -- Ultimate Griefer's Handbook |
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