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Posted - 2009.02.15 20:15:00 -
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So much for "constructive" criticism.... 
the intro sequence really hasn't ever been a strong part of EVE. The original is too long-winded and slow, this new one's too vague and doesn't really help set the scene.
Strikes me that CCP could really stand to learn a lesson from Tabula Rasa. That was a good intro sequence. Freelancer had a good intro movie too.
I hope that the movie we've seen thus far isn't the whole thing. As it stands it doesn't do enough to tell the story of EVE, and it's not punchy enough either. It's a step in the right direction in some ways, and a step backwards in others.
still, let's wait and see before leaping to conclusions.
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Verin "Stitcher" Hakatain. |
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Posted - 2009.02.16 21:27:00 -
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 Originally by: Tareen Kashaar
I agree that some feedback is in order. To quote a friend, who put this far better than I ever could:
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Extremely disappointing writing.(etc)
I'm inclined to disagree with the suggested revisions, frankly. Sure, they look good on paper, but what reads well and what sounds good are two very different things. A voiceover needs cadence and rhythm just as much as solid writing, if not more.
One thing I'd definitely like would be adding the after-effects used to produce the AURA voice. I know it's the same voice actress, but for that real EVE effect, I think bringing back the AURA voice with its metallic edge would be a step in the right direction.
The big thing, though, is that the intro still doesn't tell a story, even with the racial intro videos.
an intro movie is all about impact, about grabbing the player's attention. "you are about to become what all men should fear" is a DAMN good line, but the video needs to think like a cricketer or golfer, and follow through.
So I'd definitely recommend some more backstory exposition, and some different music. That sinister stuff definitely detracts from it all.
I know this is likely to read as a little amateurish, but here's an example of how I think the video could be improved.
"You are about to become what all men should fear. You have been chosen to join a young and fractured caste of demigods. Unlike most in this war-torn world, you are granted the power to truly shape the future - for you are immortal. You have all of eternity to sieze a destiny that is yours to define.
Your pursuit of power will not be unopposed, however - you are not the only one to stalk the heavens, and your fellow pilots are no less driven to succeed.... or to rule.
It is this hunger for power and control that has driven mankind throughout the ages. From homeworld to the stars, superpowers jostled for supremacy, and the universe provided them with the tools of success.
One such tool was the wormhole - a portal through which Mankind passed, emerging to find a new and untapped realm of rich resources to exploit. When the wormhole collapsed, the flame of mankind that had been carried to this New Eden flickered... but did not die.
Now, Mankind struggles against itself, as it always has. Four great nations have risen to vie for dominance in New Eden. The righteous Amarr, faithful and fervent. The democratic Gallente, liberal and passionate. The tribal Minmatar, defiant and free. The ruthless Caldari, united and driven.
The wars and alliances between these strong peoples have given rise to you, pilot. The power of armies rests at your command, the wealth of nations is yours to amass. If you die, you will be cloned back to life. But if you triumph, then there are no limits to the wealth and power you may amass. There are many roads to glory, and all of them are there to be trodden... but only by the bold.
Dare to be bold, pilot. Forge your own path to greatness."
imagine that set to the music of the original video. Keep the starship flight stuff from the new movie, and you have the best of both worlds, I think
Just my suggestion.
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Verin "Stitcher" Hakatain. |